For each of the projects write a paragraph that offers at least 5 points of constructive criticism or needs improvement and at least 4 points of positive feedback. Post this feedback to the appropriate blog entry by 5:00 p.m. tonight. Sign your initials to your feedback.
Write your criticism/positive feedback here:
To start, the intro page and thesis of your website was simple and to the point, I liked it. Not only that, but your clear use of sources and pictures made the layout of the website look great. However, it did seem to be a lot of information in a small amount of space, so perhaps summarizing more would be helpful. The timeline also seemed a little hard to navigate, and I also think adding a video would help brighten up your pages. Perhaps even some more pictures too. Good work though! Easily my favorite project.
This website was laid out in a self-explanatory way that allowed it to be super user friendly and easy to navigate. Also, the suburbs that were chosen were very relevant to Los Angeles as well as the area we all live in. The pictures used were vibrant and helped display what was discussed in the text. Also, there was a lot of information covered. However, due to the formatting of the website it appeared very grey and drab. The background image was dark and the scrolling nature of the website made it seem very text book like. Changing the background picture and breaking up the text with pictures or videos may allow the website to seem less text intensive. Also, because the website was so text intensive, highlight the important info or use subheadings to help users find exactly what they need quickly.
I’ll start with my positive comments. I like how on the home page each Suburb had a picture link that went to its description and history. I also liked how the timeline was integrated into the suburbs; helped to illustrated the duration of the suburbs development. The website looked visually interesting and also had a nice layout. The text for each suburb needs to be condensed a little, too much text, and also, to add more pictures to the timeline which I believe you were going to do. As I’ve said for every other group, I would maybe change the font and make the text bigger, times-based fonts just aren’t that interesting to look at. I would also maybe add a little section about why you chose each of the four suburbs.
The exploration of four different suburbs withing the Los Angeles area was a great idea and effective at showing the various types of suburbs. The website’s layout was unique and intuitive to use. I like how the website had a overview about page and a timeline to better describe how suburbs developed over the twentieth century. The website had a visual strong suit and was helpful in displaying the information. As for the structure of the website, I believe there should be a homepage that is clearly defined and would display the “About” section. The timeline needs more pictures and better descriptions about the events. The website link for the timeline did not work well and the site was difficult to use so maybe look into manually writing out the timeline to make it easier for the viewer. – WDH
I think the homepage of this project was excellent, and made the site very inviting and easy to navigate. I think more visuals on the timeline, and less dense text would have helped, but overall it was very nice. The images were utilized very well, and the timeline was a nice touch. I think more interesting fonts would improve the aesthetic of the site, and improving the functionality of the timeline would help as well. Some audio to break up the text would be a nice addition as well.
I just have to begin by saying that I really like the layout of the homepage with the 4 different suburbs displayed. It created a good aesthetic as well as easy navigation throughout the site. The chosen suburbs were very relevant, making it interesting to read. There was good relevant information. Also really cool that you incorporated the timeline with important dates and events. Yet, there was a lot of white space that you could utilize. A video for each suburb on either its history of its present would have been good to see. It was very text intensive, with giant long paragraphs that could be broken up for and easier read. Since there’s a lot of information, maybe bold or highlight the important key points.
I think the homepage was really interesting and helpful, however to make it a little more visually appealing it would be nice to make it symmetrical. Each page had a lot of depth and strong analysis. The navigation was also clear and easy to use, although because the pages were so long it often got tiresome to scroll through the page to find the relevant information. It might be better to divide up the pages a little more. I liked how the sources were utilized and there was a clear connection between the past and the present. The media was limited to pictures, but they were utilized well, so perhaps adding other types of media would be useful. The thesis was also not very deep, although each individual piece was strong on its own. A singular page describing how the suburbs were connected and how each demonstrates the overall theme would be helpful. Also, the timeline was not very well integrated and was not very intuitive. It would be beneficial to make it easier to read and navigate.
Overall, I liked how user friendly the website was. Also, the home page was really neat and aesthetically pleasing to the eye. I suppose you could make it symmetrical however and have two tiles above and two below instead of three and one. Upon going through the website, I saw a ton of pictures. Good job with the visual images but perhaps you could have added other forms of media. I did like the effort with the timeline. However, it could use a bit more work. It is difficult to use and see what is going on after I click on the link. Also, maybe try to make the font sizes the same size. As far as the theme of the website, its hard to see what is going on. Your “About” page seems clear and you say “the suburbs were meant to fulfill the American Dream, though their real effects over time often vary.” But I don’t see you guys addressing the American Dream you talked about on the “About” section on the rest of the website.
Having a page entirely devoted to the thesis allowed readers to know right away where they were headed intellectually. The group’s initial onset to explore the four different suburbs within Los Angeles was also a great idea. Utilizing the picture of one of the group’s grandmother as a primary source was very clever and engaging. The website was laid out well in a very user-friendly way.
While the website looked good and was easy to navigate through, it was quite bland and needs some more artistic flavor. I would also suggest changing the font and making it bigger so that readers can navigate through the website and read at easy. The usage of a timeline was a great idea, but the execution was poor – consider revising it and making it look more appealing by adding more color or pictures. Most of the other groups had some form of audio that added to the user experience. I would suggest adding this to make readers more interested in the website. Instead of having your home page be about the thesis, I would have a page devoted to a table of contents or a brief introduction on the subjects that are going to be covered.
I really loved the design of the homepage. It was fun and very dynamic, however you might consider putting the pictures with two on top and two on bottom to make it symmetrical. You might also want to focus on consistency. Some pages had different sections than others. Also some had more pictures than others. Lastly the timeline was a little confusing and the events didn’t seem entirely relevant. Lastly, you might want to find one spot to put all your sources for easy access. Apart from those issues I really loved the website. The pictures chosen were excellent and really captured suburban life. The overall design was beautiful. Dividing the different suburbs up and analyzing them each individually was a wonderful idea. It was an excellent project and I really enjoyed going through it.
The site is very professional and the timeline put the developments of these suburbs into perspective. I like that you put the specific sources at the end of their respective posts so that if we wanted to know more about a specific suburb, we know where to look. There isn’t much that I can say to improve it. The picture of the Lakewood sign was distorted when I opened that section. It isn’t immediately obvious which link is the “home” link–the one displaying the 4 different suburbs–but I think most people can figure it out. “Lakewood Today” seems to be missing content. The text in Cerritos should be separated into paragraphs instead of one long block, so it doesn’t seem as daunting to the reader. Other than those, the site is neat, organized, and feels unified.
The timeline was extremely beneficial, however the set up of the timeline could have been improved. The display of it was not very aesthetically pleasing. It was a great timeline; the display could just use some improvements. I would also attempt to focus on shortening down the text as it was a bit overwhelming to see a page full of text without any indentations or divisions. The length of text immediately took me back. Some of the context on the project was also a bit informal for my preference on a presentation. The phrase ““you are treated like trash…” although understandable, could have been rephrased in a more academic language. The last criticism I have is possible changing the text side in order to help enhance your overall display.
The project itself had very relevant and interesting information. The suburbs that were focused on are well known by our community and allowed us to be more invested. I also really liked the set up of your website and ease to navigate through the different suburbs. The project’s display was very minimalistic and this worked well with the project. The pictures that were chosen were a perfect representation and ultimately complimented the presentation very well.
I thought that the image selections were well fitted for the blog post. Specifically, I liked the background image and each post’s featured image. I thought your photos were well centered. Your captions were clear, concise, but detailed (especially for the Lynwood section).
A few areas to improve on would first be, in the “About” section. I would like to see the quote integrated into the entire post. Perhaps discuss the meaning of the quote. Another section to improve on is to perhaps include more pictures on the timeline. In addition, the “Lakewood” timeline section needs more of a description. Also, the citations appear to be cluttered and should be consolidated or reorganized. Lastly, alphabetized bibliography (especially “Lynwood”). Overall, great project!